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Single source essay: POPCORN LUNG Topic: Popcorn lung Ideas/common themes: Denver Post editorial: diacetyl is the chemical flavor; moderation is good; 2002; Denver Post story: law suit; sole case; inhaled; CNN: many workers have same symptoms POTENTIAL THESIS: Inhalation of diacetyl may contribute to symptoms of popcorn lung. Refined Refined Opinions of others: Shouldnt over inhale the micro pop Opposing view: Agree: Disagree: INTRODUCTION: Frames the topic or key approaches Whereas some people believe that over indulgence is not criminal, others hold true that it could prove deadly. Recently a Colorado native, history here State a thesis: He is a true victim of the overuse of chemicals in our lives. BODY According to the Denver Post, As read in the August 23rd, stated Bob Smith over inhaled microwave popcorn so much that he is ill. The authors in a recent CNN.com story declared similar statements by telling the saga of the twenty-three workers who are also ill. Summary or critique of topic/ whats out there Define your position on topic Acknowledge the opposition to topic Bring something new CONCLUSION Suggest a new approach Offer a solution Offer a new definiti0on Clarify a position taken by opposition